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英语作文：大家帮我看下作文有没有什么语法问题,或者用词不恰当,内容是感谢邻居帮忙照看小狗
Dear Mary:
I’m writing to express our gratitude for your taking good care of Smart during our vacation.
Smart was such a lively dog,when we got home .you know,since five years ago we picked him up from the street ,he has become one of the member in our family ,we have keep deep affection ,and when our family decided to have a trip to Roman on vacation,I began to worry about how to arrange him,but,to my relief,you propsed that you were willing to attend him,at heart.
I thanks for your kindness and zeal again.In this travel ,I have prepared a delicate gift for you to express heartfelt thanks.
yours sincerely
LiMing
Dear Mary:
I’m writing to express our gratitude for your taking good care of Smart during our vacation.
Smart was such a lively dog,when we got home .you know,since five years ago we picked him up from the street ,he has become one of the member in our family ,we have keep deep affection ,and when our family decided to have a trip to Roman on vacation,I began to worry about how to arrange him,but,to my relief,you propsed that you were willing to attend him,at heart.
I thanks for your kindness and zeal again.In this travel ,I have prepared a delicate gift for you to express heartfelt thanks.
yours sincerely
LiMing
1.he has become one of the member 可以写成：he has been a member of our family
2.on vacation着重于度假中吧,感觉不大好,你可以这样写：when our family decieded to go to Rome for a vacation.或者你直接把后面的on vacation去掉也行,它和前面的have a trip 存在意义上的重复了（Roman是罗马人,罗马是Rome ）
3.you propsed that you were willing to attend him,at heart.这句话我没看懂你要写什么propsed应该是一个错误的单词吧,我查字典都没找到,如果你要写建议的话应该是proposed,承诺应该是promised
4.感觉你第二段全部用逗号,这样不大好.一句话说完了该用句号就要用句号.不然的话就变成一句非常长的长句,这时的谓语动词都要小心.还有你的内容链接不上.前面“when we got home ”下面却没与之对应的句子,插叙写了些后,把原意给忘了,这也是要注意到.最后要注意连词的运用,你这篇没用什么连词,其实连词用的好的话,经常可以增加文章亮点,你第二段用了那么多逗号却只用了一个and,而且说实在的,这个and放在这里我都觉得没什么必要,“ but,to my relief,”倒是用的不错,可以记些语句间的连词,看看它们的用法,这样你的作文会更漂亮.
我写作一般都靠语感,所以说的也不准,还是看看其他人的意见,综合一下比较好.
2.on vacation着重于度假中吧,感觉不大好,你可以这样写：when our family decieded to go to Rome for a vacation.或者你直接把后面的on vacation去掉也行,它和前面的have a trip 存在意义上的重复了（Roman是罗马人,罗马是Rome ）
3.you propsed that you were willing to attend him,at heart.这句话我没看懂你要写什么propsed应该是一个错误的单词吧,我查字典都没找到,如果你要写建议的话应该是proposed,承诺应该是promised
4.感觉你第二段全部用逗号,这样不大好.一句话说完了该用句号就要用句号.不然的话就变成一句非常长的长句,这时的谓语动词都要小心.还有你的内容链接不上.前面“when we got home ”下面却没与之对应的句子,插叙写了些后,把原意给忘了,这也是要注意到.最后要注意连词的运用,你这篇没用什么连词,其实连词用的好的话,经常可以增加文章亮点,你第二段用了那么多逗号却只用了一个and,而且说实在的,这个and放在这里我都觉得没什么必要,“ but,to my relief,”倒是用的不错,可以记些语句间的连词,看看它们的用法,这样你的作文会更漂亮.
我写作一般都靠语感,所以说的也不准,还是看看其他人的意见,综合一下比较好.
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