英语 语法 求纠正!最后一个回答可能会有疑问,注明我是现在生活在韩国的韩国人First,I would tell him

英语 语法 求纠正!
最后一个回答可能会有疑问,注明我是现在生活在韩国的韩国人
First,I would tell him it is a dangerous decision to quit school for practicing basketball.I can know that his passion to basketball is very big that he even wants to quit school.But it is not easy for a Korean to succeed in the NBA.So I would suggest him to consider more carefully about quitting school.
If I could have any three superpowers,first I want to be able to teleport.So I can move to everywhere just in a second.It can highly reduce the time of moving to other places.Second,I want to be able to stop the time.Now many students are busy studying.There many tasks to do.If I can stop the time,I can do many things but the time doesn’t pass.The last power I’d like to have is to read other’s mind.If I can know everyone’s mind,it will be more swimming to live.
First,I want to liberalize the hair of students.Our school regulates students’ hair too short.The school says a student’s appearance should be neat,but this is out of line.I think students have rights to manage their hair by themselves.Because it is part of their bodies.Second,I hope our school let students play table tennis during P.E classes.Because my favorite sport is table tennis.Lastly,I want to delay the time to go to school for one hour.Because I am always tired when I go to school.
I have been to China for 7 years.I went to China when I was 8 years old.In the elementary school,although my Chinese was not perfect,I could make many friends.My best friend was Yi yang,his English name was Sunny.But when I went to middle school we separated.And 1 year later I came back to Korea.But I forgot say to him.So I cannot keep in touch with him now.If have I told him my e-mail,I would chat with him now.And if I go to China in the future,I can meet him,too.So I regret this a lot.

倒数第三行,应该是 But I forgot to say (good bye) to him
还是第三行,If 后应该不用倒装吧
语法就这些吧
不过这篇东西相当无聊